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@@ -4,10 +4,10 @@ It's been a couple of weeks. It's late on a Thursday evening. Anna is
 sitting in the subway train, on a bench. On the Helsinki subway the
 trains are orange, and the benches are orange. The benches are in
 pairs to form booths, ostensibly to get the famously asocial locals to
-be modern and urban. In practice, it meant they read books,
-newspapers, or, these days, looked at their smartphones. Or out of the
-windows into the underground tunnel walls. Anything to avoid talking
-with each other.
+be modern and urban and chat with their co-passengers. In practice, it
+means they read books, newspapers, or, these days, looked at their
+smartphones. Or just stared out of the windows into the underground tunnel walls.
+Anything to avoid talking with each other.
 
 Anna is doing that. It's been another long, stressful day at work, and
 she's enjoying watching episode of her latest favourite TV show on the
@@ -84,7 +84,7 @@ mental healing process, but I don't really want to re-live it with
 everyone separately. Sorry. I didn't tell the police, you know how
 they've treated me before, when I've been raped. Don't trust them."
 
-"Oh,  of mine, nothing to be sorry for. I know exactly how you
+"Oh,  my, you have nothing to be sorry for. I know exactly how you
 feel. I'm here if you want or need to talk, about anything, at any
 time, but there's no pressure. OK?"