From 5f0327f852a48fc676cdab59accb61078bc87fdb Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Thomas Hochstein Date: Sun, 10 Jun 2018 16:05:06 +0200 Subject: Assorted spelling and language adjustments. Signed-off-by: Thomas Hochstein --- negotiation.mdwn | 10 +++++----- 1 file changed, 5 insertions(+), 5 deletions(-) (limited to 'negotiation.mdwn') diff --git a/negotiation.mdwn b/negotiation.mdwn index e7ded16..ce59a33 100644 --- a/negotiation.mdwn +++ b/negotiation.mdwn @@ -435,7 +435,7 @@ make sure the SmartHome guys understand they're being humiliated. The guy looks puzzled for a moment, then speaks. "Please?" Nina lazily turns to her laptop, and taps a key. The door locks click-clack again. -The big monitor also shows that the turned off the heating. +The big monitor also shows that she turned off the heating. I look at the old guy. He's still sitting in his chair, with his hands flat on the table. "Is there something you should say, sir?" He @@ -452,7 +452,7 @@ could you tell us the new password, please? If it pleases you." Nina is clearly enjoying the situation. "Sure. I'll save you the hassle of having to physically reset all the gadgets. The new password -is 'iabasaisfa', which is short for 'I am bad at security and I should +is 'iabasaisfb', which is short for 'I am bad at security and I should feel bad'. All lower case." The SmartHomers being now properly cowed, I walk the through the rest @@ -512,7 +512,7 @@ Anyway, Robin, how do you feel working with them?" "They're still brogrammers, and I don't think that will ever change. However, after today, they know we can humiliate them at will, and I'm -willing to assume they're behave out of self-protection, if nothing +willing to assume they'll behave out of self-protection, if nothing else." "We can't pull stunts like this again. Their fragile male egos won't @@ -532,7 +532,7 @@ Robin takes over. "That's an excellent point, Bert. Here's how I think we divide this up. Nina sets up and maintains a lab with their hardware so we have something to work with. Andrew does most of the porting, with help from Bert and possibly others. It'll be a good -learning experience for Bert. I and Nina help them redesign their +learning experience for Bert. Me and Nina help them redesign their applications to run on our platform, and review everything so it's secure and sensible. Anna, you keep track of everything and make sure we have what we need to work smoothly, as usual. OK?" @@ -587,7 +587,7 @@ also let's us avoid a lot of bugs, which saves a ton of debugging work, and thus time. We have a reputation of delivering quality, and this is one of the ways in which we achieve it. -"OK, Nina, if there's anything you to buy, you know what to do." +"OK, Nina, if there's anything you need to buy, you know what to do." "Are we working from our office, or theirs? Should I ready the portaserver?" -- cgit v1.2.1 From cfb38478c6455f2c8f3e166a19cbdea2c0007317 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Thomas Hochstein Date: Sun, 10 Jun 2018 16:05:13 +0200 Subject: Please drop or squash this commit. You switched from first person "I" in the first chapters to third person "Anna" in the later ones, but "Anna" raising "my" hands doesn't work out, I think. --- negotiation.mdwn | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) (limited to 'negotiation.mdwn') diff --git a/negotiation.mdwn b/negotiation.mdwn index ce59a33..03188ef 100644 --- a/negotiation.mdwn +++ b/negotiation.mdwn @@ -47,7 +47,7 @@ her mouth. An evil glint shows up in her eyes. "I'm not saying they're good. But we should look at them and give them a chance." -Anna raises both of my hands, hands flat, palms outward, in a +I raise both of my hands, hands flat, palms outward, in a sign that everyone should be calm. In Andrew's case, that he should stay calm, since he's never anything else. "I sense a rough consensus that we should give them a second chance. I -- cgit v1.2.1 From a8e51deeabf7d730d9462a732ea80ef2e2485c8c Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Thomas Hochstein Date: Sun, 10 Jun 2018 16:05:14 +0200 Subject: Please drop or squash this commit. "Need to solve" or "need to have solved"? --- negotiation.mdwn | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) (limited to 'negotiation.mdwn') diff --git a/negotiation.mdwn b/negotiation.mdwn index 03188ef..d1b3a88 100644 --- a/negotiation.mdwn +++ b/negotiation.mdwn @@ -263,7 +263,7 @@ comfortable." I jump in. "Let's assume we can sort that out. I'll email you, Sam, our standard contract and you can review it with your people. Now, since we have Robin here, should we talk about -the technical problems that you need to solved? I know +the technical problems that you need to solve? I know you're not a techie, and before we take on this project, we'll want to talk to your people in detail about this, but we can get started. I think Robin already has some ideas for -- cgit v1.2.1